Thursday, 15 November 2012

Introductory Paragraphs


Unit 3 – introductory paragraph
(shock/horror, 2nd person, fast pace)
Did you know that in 2010/11 813,6000 people were admitted into hospital due to alcohol related diseases? Did you know that every year around 24,000 people die due to alcohol in the UK alone? Well now you do. Drinking alcohol can lead to severe problems to yourself and others around you. Is it worth the risk?
(anecdote, 1st person, fast pace)
It was great. All my friends together, celebrating finishing another year of school. Partying hard. The alcohol was flowing and the music was bouncing. My best friend was banging out the moves and it all seemed hilarious until he fell and banged his head. The next thing I knew was a paramedic pounding on the door...
(summary, 3rd person, slow/long pace, 120 words approx)
This article will discuss the long term and short term effects of alcohol misuse; therefore this article is here to give information and guidance for those who find alcohol being a problem in their lives. Alcohol doesn’t only have serious effects on the user, but also those around them. Alcohol not only changes a person mentally for the duration of consuming alcohol, but also permanently, this is dangerous, very dangerous. Of course drinking alcohol appears to be fun and exciting, but those taking part in the consummation of alcohol are putting themselves and others around them in danger. Using alcohol to suppress feelings is never a good idea, it often appears that the feelings felt before consuming alcohol are progressively emphasised after the intake of alcohol.
The summary introduction is used to give brief detail about the contents of the article. When writing a magazine article I wouldn’t choose to use the third example for an introduction because it wouldn’t appeal to the specific target audience of 16-21 year olds. It wouldn’t be appropriate to use this style of introduction because it is too detailed and formal to appeal to this age range. Therefore out of the three examples I have written I would choose to use the first one using the shock/horror introduction written 2nd person narrative voice. This is because it appears direct to the reader and isn’t too formal, yet uses statistics to draw the reader in.  

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